AStudentGuide
ToWriting
the
ExtendedEssay
RichardMontgomeryHighSchool
InternationalBaccalaureateMagnet
Classof2021ExtendedEssayGuide
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Introduction
By this point in your high school career, you’ve developed a healthy skepticism toward knowledge
production. You’ve become expert at both subject matter and methodology, what is known and
how it is known. Identifying logical flaws, bias, and limitations is becoming second nature to you.
Your skepticism is hard earned, and you’re entitled to it, but your life will be sadly attenuated if
you don’t balance your skepticism with something more constructive. The Extended Essay is your
chance to go beyond taking things apart and begin to figure out how to put something together.
Essays are interpretive or argumentative pieces of writing. Your job is to write a persuasive essay
gathering, applying, repurposing, questioning evidence in order to give your best answer to a
question. If you find yourself summarizing and reporting (or, worse, cutting and pasting) stuff you
read on the internet in the middle of the night, you’re doing it wrong.
The word essay also describes a first or tentative effort. Your Extended Essay will not be your
masterpiece. But if you take the process seriously, you will write something you can be proud of
now and, more importantly, learn lessons that will help you in college and beyond.
The process will ultimately make you a more appreciative consumer of knowledge who will
understand that just because something has flaws doesn’t always make it completely useless. It
will also start you down the road toward becoming a thoughtful, disciplined, and ethical producer
of knowledge so your voice can be heard effectively on the problems and questions you care
about.
For millennia, academic life has been defined by an ongoing conversation about what we know in
which the most persuasive voices carry the day. It’s time for you to join the conversation. Let’s
get started.
Todd Stillman, History Department Resource Teacher and IB trainer, Richard Montgomery High
School
ThisGuideBookBelongsto:
MyEESupervisoris:
IFFOUND,PleasereturnthisguidebooktoMs.Day,theExtendedEssay
Coordinator,intheIBMagnetOffice,Suite200.
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Table of Contents
Introduction......................................................................................................................................................3
ExtendedEssayDueDates...............................................................................................................................6
AwardofDiplomaPoints–theroleofTheExtendedEssay,andTOK.............................................................7
Sampleresearchquestions:..............................................................................................................................8
TOK/EEResearchQuestionAssignment..........................................................................................................9
WarningsaboutPlagiarism.............................................................................................................................10
ExtendedEssayPre‐DraftPlanningAssignment.............................................................................................11
PreparingtoWritetheDraftoftheExtendedEssay......................................................................................13
HowToWriteaConclusion............................................................................................................................20
EEPlanningforFirstDraft...............................................................................................................................21
AssessmentCriteriafortheExtendedEssay..................................................................................................24
ReflectionintheExtendedEssay....................................................................................................................29
UsingManageBacfortheExtendedEssay......................................................................................................33
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Notes
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Background on the Extended Essay from the International Baccalaureate
In order to earn the International Baccalaureate Diploma, all candidates must submit an extended essay on
a topic of their choice in one of the subjects of the IB curriculum. This culminating assessment is
completed by the middle of the second year of the program. Students are supervised by a teacher qualified
to teach the subject of their essays or suitably familiar enough with the subject area to provide adequate
supervision and advisement over the course of the research and writing process. The essays are graded by
examiners appointed by the Chief Examiner of each subject in the IB Office in Cardiff, Wales.
Class of 2021 Extended Essay Due Dates
By November 20, 2019 Extended Essay Supervisors assigned; Students schedule meeting
with supervisor
By December 18, 2019 First meeting with supervisor; completion of forms which will be
provided via TOK
By January 31, 2020 Research Question due; see the RM Student Guide to Writing
the Extended Essay for details
By February 21, 2020 Extended Essay Pre-Draft Planning Assignment due; see the RM
Student Guide to Writing the Extended Essay for details
By April 30, 2020 Extended Essay First Draft Uploaded to ManageBac
By June 2, 2020 Update with Supervisor; First Extended Essay Reflection due on
ManageBac
By September 14,
2020 Meet with Supervisor; Second Draft and Second Reflection due
on ManageBac
By September 30, 2020 Final Copy Due on ManageBac
By October 16, 2020 Final Meeting with Supervisor and Viva Voce completed. Final
Reflection due on ManageBac
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Theory of knowledge
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Award of Diploma Points – the role of The Extended Essay, and TOK
The extended essay contributes to the overall diploma score through the award of points in conjunction
with theory of knowledge. A maximum of three points are awarded according to a student’s combined
performance in both the extended essay and theory of knowledge. Both the extended essay and theory of
knowledge are measured against published assessment criteria. According to the quality of the work, and
based on the application of these assessment criteria, a student’s performance in each of the extended
essay and theory of knowledge will fall into one of the five bands previously described in the criterion
for each assessment.
The total number of points awarded is determined by the combination of the performance levels achieved
by the student in both the extended essay and theory of knowledge according to the following matrix.
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Sample research questions:
The following table gives guidance on the difference between unclear and unfocused research questions
and those that are appropriately clear and focused, lending themselves to in-depth research.
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Unclear,unfocusedandunarguableresearch
questions
Clear,focused,narrowresearchquestionslending
themselvestoin‐depthresearch
WhatwastheimpactofHoChiMinh’sallegiance
toLenin?
Towhatextentwasnationalismtheguidingfactor
inHoChiMinh’sadoptionofLeninismin1920?
WhatisthehistoryofChinesetheatre?
HowdoesthelegacyofMeiLanFangcontribute
tomodernJingju?
Howimportantischlorophylltoplantlife? Whatistheeffectofdifferentconcentrationsof
kinetin on leaves aging and the biosynthesis of
chlorophyll?
HowcantheUSgovernment’sspendingpolicybe
reformed?
TowhatextentdidtherisingCOEpricesaffectthe
demandfornewandusedcarsbytheconsumer
populationandhenceaffecttherevenuegenerated
bytheSingaporeaneconomyfortheperiod2012–
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Sample Research Questions from Real Extended Essays:
What does Joseph Conrad’s portrayal of light and dark in Heart of Darkness and “The Lagoon” reveal about
his views on European imperialism in the 19th century? (Literature)
To what extent did the film industry and the formation of the Hollywood blacklist affect communism and
the public perception of it in the 1940s and 50s? (Film)
What is the efficiency of traffic in the network of hallways of Richard Montgomery High School? (Math)
How has the fusion of Neo-Confucian values and Westernization contributed to the cultural acceptability
of plastic surgery in South Korea? (World Studies)
How does temperature affect the frequencies produced by a guitar? (Physics)
How do the musical styles of the cool jazz period presented in Miles Davis’ album "Kind of Blue" influence
the fusion jazz genre? (Music)
Could the diplomatic consequences of the Gaza Flotilla Raid of 2010 have been lessened or avoided?
(Peace and Conflict)
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Name:PerryWinkle
Date:
The purpose of this assignment is to lead you to the research question that will be at the heart of your extended
essay. The research question is the central theme of your paper: it is the thing you are arguing. Therefore,
for most subject areas, it is vitally important to craft a research question that is arguable, and, more
importantly, arguable within the word limit and subject guidelines of your EE subject area. It is challenging
to create a knowledge question that is broad enough to allow for a wide spectrum of research, and yet narrow
enough to enable you to focus your essay and limit it to 3500-4000 words. In order to do this, you will spend
time researching, experimenting with different ideas, and evaluating possible questions. The end result will
be one research question that then will be the focus of your paper.
Please note: it is possible (and in some cases, good) that your research question will change at some point in
the future. So you shouldn’t feel boxed into the research question you come up with at the end of this week;
however, you should work hard to hone in on a quality research question during this time.
TheAssignment:
Submit one research question, a properly formatted works cited list of the sources you found that pertain to
that question, and one paragraph that explains why you think the question lends itself to an effective
investigation within the word limit. This is due on Friday, January 31, 2020.
Grading:
Appropriate Research Question 10 points
Paragraph Explanation 10 points
Works Cited 5 Points
(Seeowl.english.purdue.eduforguidelinesonformattingWorksCitedpages.Generally,useMLAformat
forliteratureandthearts,andAPAfornaturalandsocialscience
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Warnings about Plagiarism
Do not plagiarize. Plagiarism ranges from taking text in bulk from other sources and not citing and/or
quoting it to making a typo in the bibliography. You must be very careful to cite every single idea that you
get from another source, regardless of whether or not you’ve taken any direct quotes. If you are approaching
a due date and haven’t made much progress, the absolute worst thing you can do is plagiarize. It is very,
very easy for your teachers and supervisors to detect plagiarism; plus, it’s wrong. So just don’t do it. If
you have questions about what constitutes plagiarism, you definitely should ask, because sometimes it isn’t
clear. But the basic idea is that if you have gotten any idea or piece of information from any source other
than your own mind, you have to accurately state where you got that idea, with the exception of commonly-
held prior knowledge (ex: 1 + 1 = 2; Abraham Lincoln was assassinated, etc.).
HelpfulHints
1. Do not wait until the last minute on any step of this process. Utilize the new Researcher’s
Reflection Space to plan, write notes, reminders, thoughts, ideas, and anything else.
2. Though only three meetings with your supervisor are required, see them regularly to discuss your
progress or any questions you may have.
3. Save your notes and work from every stage of this process. Use ManageBac to communicate with
your supervisor, so that all your meetings and conversations are captured.
4. If you are confused about anything, talk to your teacher or supervisor as soon as humanly
possible.
5. Do not panic if you mess up. Until you submit your final draft, everything is fixable.
6. Do not limit yourself to electronic sources; books are extremely valuable.
7. The EE requires patience. Research doesn’t always go smoothly; sources can be hard to find;
conclusions might be not what you were expecting; it can be very hard to synthesize the information
you’ve found. Be patient and devote time just to thinking things through.
8. You do not need to come up with an earth-shattering thesis or conclusion. The point of this
project is to learn how to research properly and make an effective argument by presenting
information in an organized way. Do not feel pressure to come up with an “original” thesis.
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Name:ShelFish
Date:
Extended Essay Pre-Draft Planning Assignment
Purpose: The purpose of this assignment is to give you the opportunity to plan to write the first draft of
your extended essay.
Directions: You will write an introductory paragraph and a list of potential sections from the body of your
essay. On the top of the page you must write your research question and subject area, and on the bottom you
must include a signature line for your supervisor.
Your introductory paragraph should:
Introduce your topic
Provide some background information about your topic
Explain/Address why your topic is significant/worthy of investigation
Implicitly or explicitly state your research question in bold
You should not have a thesis. Why should you not have a thesis at this point?
Your list of potential sections should be well-thought out and logical. If you are writing a paper on the
Fibonacci sequence and its applications, you should not BS this paper last minute and create a section called,
“The Fibonacci Sequence and Broccoli,” or something like that (though in certain cases that could work).
Think carefully about the information you want to include in your paper. The more work you do now, the
less you’ll have to do later. Almost guaranteed!
DUE FRIDAY, FEBRUARY 21, 2020
Introductory Paragraph – 10 Points
List of at Least 3 Potential Sections – 10 Points
Overall Cleanliness/Neatness/Readability – 5 Points
Supervisor’s Signature and Comments (as transcribed by you) - 10 Points
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Name:SandyBeach
Date:
Extended Essay Pre-Draft Planning Assignment - Sample
Research Question: What do the 2014 Baltimore Orioles demonstrate about how determination and
motivation affect performance?
Subject Area: Psychology
Introduction
For the first time since 1997 the Baltimore Orioles won the American League East Division. This means
that they were able to beat, among others, the New York Yankees and the Boston Red Sox, two teams whose
payroll for their players far exceeded the Orioles’. Additionally, at the start of the season the Orioles were
projected by some sources to finish in last or second-to-last place. Somehow, the Orioles managed to defy
those expectations, even surviving injuries to key players, such as Gold Glove-winning catcher Matt Wieters
and third baseman Manny Machado. The 2014 Orioles electrified their fans with excitement; additionally,
since Major League Baseball is one of the most popular sports in the country, and by far the best, the Orioles
affected a large swathe of the public over the course of the surprising season. Therefore, it is very important
to explore how and why this happened; in this essay, using the
2014 Orioles as subjects, the relationship
between determination and motivation and performance will
be explored. [Then thesis, once formed]
Possible Sections in Body of Essay
Pre-Season Expectations of the Orioles
The Season
Injuries to Key Players
Not in First Place before the All-Star Break/Standings over Time
Attitudes of Position Players
Attitudes of Pitchers
Attitudes of the Manager and Coaching Staff
Conclusion
Supervisor’s Transcribed Comments [Leave blank until meeting with supervisor]:
Supervisor’sSignature: Date:
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Preparing to Write the Draft of the Extended Essay
Writingtheextendedessay
The structure of the essay is very important. It helps students to organize the argument, making the
best use of the evidence collected.
There are six required elements of the final work to be submitted. More details about each element
are given in the “Presentation” section. Please note that the order in which these elements are
presented here is not necessarily the order in which they should be written.
Six required elements of the extended essay:
1. Title page
2. Contents page
3. Introduction
4. Body of the essay
5. Conclusion
6. References and bibliography
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Title page
The title page should include only the following information:
• title of the essay
• research question
• subject for which the essay is registered (if it is a language essay also state which category it
falls into; if a world studies essay also state the theme and the two subjects utilized)
• word count.
An important note:
Please note that name of the student or the school should not appear on the title page or on any
page headers. This is because the work is assessed anonymously.
The title
The title of your essay should be a clear, focused summative statement of your research, which
gives the reader an indication of your research topic. It should not be phrased as a research
question.
Title Research question
Negativeexternalitiesofconsumption:
Australianpolicyoncigarettepackaging
HoweffectivehastheAustralianpolicyofplaincigarette
packagingbeeninreducingthenegativeexternalities
associatedwiththeconsumptionofcigarettesinX?
Commodificationandthebody—an
ethnographicstudyofsocial
representationsaboutthehumanbody
withrelationtoorgandonation
Towhatextentcanweinterpretthenegativeattitudefrom
laymentowardsorgandonationasanactofresistance
towardsthedemandsofthehegemonicmedicalmodel?The
caseoforgandonationinArgentina.
Anexplorationofevilasamotivating
forceindrama
HoweffectivelydoesChristopherMarlowepresenthisview
ofevilinDrFaustus?
Thefeasibilityofwirelessnetworkingin
acity‐widecontext
Towhatextentiswirelessnetworkingafeasiblealternativeto
cablednetworkingwithinawhole‐citycontext?
Contents page
A contents page must be provided at the beginning of the extended essay and all pages should
be numbered. Please note that an index page is not required and if included will be treated as
if it is not present.
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Introduction
The introduction should tell the reader what to expect in the essay. The introduction should make
clear to the reader the focus of the essay, the scope of the research, in particular an indication of the
sources to be used, and an insight into the line of argument to be taken.
While students should have a sense of the direction and key focus of their essay, it is sometimes
advisable to finalize the introduction once the body of the essay is complete.
Body of the essay (research, analysis, discussion and
evaluation)
The main task is writing the body of the essay, which should be presented in the form of a
reasoned argument. The form of this varies with the subject of the essay but as the argument
develops it should be clear to the reader what relevant evidence has been discovered, where/how
it has been discovered and how it supports the argument. In some subjects, for example, the
sciences, sub-headings within the main body of the essay will help the reader to understand the
argument (and will also help the student
to keep on track). In structuring their extended essay, students must take into consideration the
expected conventions of the subject in which their extended essay is registered.
Once the main body of the essay is complete, it is possible to finalize the introduction (which
tells the reader what to expect) and the conclusion (which says what has been achieved,
including notes of any limitations and any questions that have not been resolved).
Any information that is important to the argument must not be included in appendices or
footnotes/ endnotes. The examiner will not read notes or appendices, so an essay that is not
complete in itself will be compromised across the assessment criteria.
Conclusion
The conclusion says what has been achieved, including notes of any limitations and any
questions that have not been resolved. While students might draw conclusions throughout the
essay based on their findings, it is important that there is a final, summative conclusion at the
end. This conclusion(s) must relate to the research question posed.
References and bibliography
Students should use their chosen style of academic referencing as soon as they start writing. That
way they are less likely to forget to include a citation. It is also easier than trying to add references
at a later stage.
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Presentation
The extended essay should be written in a clear, correct and formal academic style, appropriate to
the subject from which the topic is drawn. Given that the extended essay is a formally written
research paper, it should strive to maintain a professional, academic look.
To help achieve this, the following formatting is required:
• the use of 12-point, readable font
• double spacing
• page numbering
• no candidate or school name on the title page or page headers.
Submitting the extended essay in the required format will help set the tone of the essay and
will aid readability for on-screen assessment by examiners.
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Word counts
The upper limit is 4,000 words for all extended essays.
Please note: Examiners are instructed not to read or assess any material in excess of the word
limit. This means that essays containing more than 4,000 words will be compromised across all
assessment criteria. Given the holistic nature of the assessment criteria, students who write in
excess of the word limit will self- penalize across all criteria. For example, in criterion B, any
knowledge and understanding demonstrated beyond the 4,000-word limit will be treated as if it
were not present; in criterion C, analysis, discussion or evaluation made beyond the 4,000-word
limit will be treated as if the point had not been made.
Supervisors and students should be aware that the e-upload of extended essays will facilitate the
automatic recognition of a cut-off point for assessment. Students should ensure that they remain
within the word limit and should edit accordingly.
Please refer to the following guidance on what content should be included in the word count.
Included in the word count
Not included in the word count
The introduction The contents page
The main body Maps, charts, diagrams, annotated illustrations
The conclusion Tables
Quotations Equations, formulas and calculations
Footnotes and/or endnotes that are not references Citations/references (whether parenthetical,
numbered, footnotes or endnotes)
The bibliography
The Reflections on planning and progress form
Please refer to the document entitled Diploma Programme assessment: Principles and practice
for further clarification of word count requirements.
A note for students writing in Chinese and Japanese:
Students writing their extended essay in Japanese or Chinese should use the following conversions.
• Japanese: 1 word = approximately 2 Japanese characters (upper limit 8,000 characters)
• Chinese: 1 word = approximately 1.2 Chinese characters (upper limit 4,800 characters
)
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Illustrations
Presentation and overall neatness are important, and it is essential that illustrative material, if
included, is well set out and used effectively. Graphs, diagrams, tables and maps are effective
only if they are clearly labelled and can be interpreted with ease.
Any labelling should contain the minimum information to ensure the examiner understands
the significance of the map, chart, diagram or illustration. It must not include commentary, as
this will be considered as part of the essay discussion and thus included in the word count.
All such material that is incorporated into the extended essay must be directly related to the text
and acknowledged where appropriate. The use of photographs and other images is acceptable
only if they are captioned and/or annotated and are used to illustrate a specific point made in
the extended essay. Students should be advised to use illustrations with caution as excessive use
may detract from the discussion in the essay. They should only be used if they are relevant and
appropriate to a point being made as part of the argument of the essay.
Tables
The use of tables should be considered carefully and are only really appropriate in certain subjects.
Tables must not be used in an attempt to circumvent the word limit.
Footnotes and endnotes
Footnotes and endnotes may be used for referencing purposes and if this is the case will not be
included in the word count of the essay. If information is contained in a footnote or endnote and is
not a reference, this must be included in the word count. In order to avoid confusion and
unwittingly exceed the word limit, students are advised to avoid using footnotes or endnotes other
than for referencing purposes unless it is appropriate.
As footnotes and endnotes are not an essential part of the extended essay students must take care
to ensure that all information with direct relevance to the analysis, discussion and evaluation of
their essay is contained in the main body of it.
An essay that attempts to evade the word limit by including important material in footnotes or
endnotes will be compromised across the assessment criteria. Please note that footnotes and
endnotes are added to the word count as they are encountered.
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Appendices
Appendices are not an essential part of the extended essay and examiners will not read them, or use any
information contained within them, in the assessment of the essay. Students must take care to ensure that all
information with direct relevance to the analysis, discussion and evaluation of their essay is contained
in the main body of it. Appendices should therefore be avoided except in the following instances:
• an exemplar of a questionnaire or interview questions
• an exemplar of permission letters
• group 1, category 1 essays: copies of poems or short stories (of less than three pages)
• group 1, category 3 essays: excerpts from newspapers, advertisements and transcripts of speeches
• language acquisition, category 1 and 2: excerpts from newspapers, advertisements, transcripts of
speeches, etc
• language acquisition, category 3: excerpts or copies of poems or short stories (less than 3 pages)
• an external mentor letter, where one has been used
• raw data or statistical tables for experimental sciences (this should not include any analysis or
conclusions).
Students should not continually refer to material presented in an appendix as this may disrupt the
continuity of the essay and examiners are not required to refer to them.
Specimen materials
Specimen materials used in, or produced by, investigations do not form part of the extended essay and
must not be submitted. Photographic evidence may be submitted in place of such material.
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HOW TO WRITE A CONCLUSION
Your conclusion wraps up your argument and leaves the reader with some final things to think about. Your
conclusion should stem from what you have already written. Effective conclusions therefore often refer back
to ideas presented in a paper’s introduction.
In general, your conclusion should echo your major thesis without repeating the words verbatim. However,
since your paper has already proven your thesis, your conclusion should move beyond it to reflect on the
significance of the ideas you just presented. It should answer the question, “OK, I’ve read your paper, but so
what?” In other words, why are these ideas important?
Effective conclusions:
Reflect on how your topic relates to larger issues (in the novel, in society, in history).
Show how your topic affects the reader’s life.
Evaluate the concepts you have presented.
Issue a call for action on the part of your audience.
Ask questions generated by your findings.
Make predictions.
Recommend a solution.
Connect back to introduction, esp. if you used a metaphor, anecdote, or vivid image.
Give a personal statement about the topic.
Conclusions to avoid:
Beginning with “In conclusion …”
Restating your thesis and all your main points without adding anything new.
Bringing up a new topic.
Adding irrelevant details (esp. just to make a paper longer).
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EE Planning for First Draft
Sample Subject Area: History Sample Topic: How Did the U.S. Civil War Affect Medical Procedures?
Thesis
You do not need a thesis at this stage, although some of you may have one.* However, your research
question must be included in your introduction and stated as a question.
Word Count
The EE is a maximum of 4,000 words, so a good target for the first draft would be 2,300 words. But, of
course, the EE is about quality, not quantity, so if your first draft is 1,697 words and represents your best
effort, then please do not write 303 words of bla di bla. It’s a waste of time for you to write that, and an
even bigger waste of time for us to read that. It’s also a waste of ink, like this sentence.
Research
Given that we have been working on EE research during this whole testing time period, it is
expected that you will have conducted some additional research since the last time you turned in
anything. This doesn’t necessarily mean consulting more sources; it could mean reading more of a
source you’ve already found. But most likely it means finding and incorporating new sources.*
Organization
Your first draft should show evidence that you’ve started to organize sections of your essay in a
logical way. You should arrange the sections of your essay in a way that best supports your argument
and best keeps the attention of the reader.* It’s harder than it seems, so think about it carefully. You do
not need to do an outline, but they really can help. Here is a suggested structure:
I. Introduction
a. Background information
b. Research Question and Thesis
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II-X. Body Paragraphs
c. Topic sentence(s) that supports/opposes/relates to thesis in some way
d. Evidence with citations and/or footnotes and an explanation of how it supports the topic
sentence/thesis
e. Rebuttal of opposing evidence, if applicable
f. Concluding sentence(s)
X+1. Conclusion
g. Restate thesis
h. Briefly review strongest evidence
i. Acknowledge and rebut opposing evidence j.
Wrap-up
Works Cited
You need one, and it should be properly formatted.
NOTE: Your 1
st
draft will not be accepted if you have not documented your sources. Talk to your supervisor
concerning which form of documentation is required.
*Future Steps
You must include a bulleted list of specific steps you intend to take in order to complete future drafts of
your essay (this is separate from your draft and is not included in the word count). Depending on your
individual situation, your list could be wildly different from your classmates’.
Here is a BAD list:
Future Steps
More research
More words
More work
Organization
Here is a GOOD list:
Future Steps
Locate and analyze primary sources from Civil War surgeons
Contact Dr. Needles at the Museum of Civil War Medicine, Sterilization Department
Email Professor I.C. Yu to learn more about Civil War hospitalization
Have draft peer-reviewed to ensure logical organization – perhaps move 4
th
paragraph to the
front?
Formulate clear thesis – Did the Civil War impact medical practices? Can I prove it?
Include diagrams of surgical procedures – pre-War, War, Post-War; relationships?
Find blood from Civil War soldiers, store in freezer.
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NOTE: If your first draft is just a gigantic list of “Future Steps,” that is not good. Similarly, if you have no
future steps, that is not good, either.
This draft is worth 30 points and will determine your entire future. Of course, many of you will be at
different stages, which is fine, but all of you will be responsible for proper formatting, citations, grammar
and usage, and neatness. From there, a holistic approach will be taken to evaluate your effort and
progress. Good luck!
Rubricfor1
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DraftofExtendedEssay
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ExtendedEssay:1
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DraftRequiredElements
Introductioncontainsyourresearchquestion(statedasaquestion). Yes No
Organizationisevident. Yes No
WorksCitedispresentandproperlyformatted. Yes No
Researchisvaried. Yes No
Citations,Grammar,etc.areproperlyformattedand/orused. Yes No
FutureStepslististhoughtfulandspecific. Yes No
CurrentWordCount:
Date/TimeofScheduledSupervisorMeeting(between1/29and2/9):
HolisticScore: _/30
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Assessment Criteria for the Extended Essay
The following is a general overview and is intended to help you understand each criterion in terms of what
should be included in the extended essay to achieve the highest level. For the more specific criteria intended
for your particular subject you must look at the subject specific guidelines in the subject guide.
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Criterion Unpacking the criterion
A: Focus and method
This criterion focuses on the topic, the research question and
the methodology. It assesses the explanation of the focus of
the research (this includes the topic and the research
question), how the research will be undertaken, and how the
focus is maintained throughout the essay.
B: Knowledge and
understanding
This criterion assesses the extent to which the research relates
to the subject area/discipline used to explore the research
question, or in the case of the world studies extended essay, the
issue addressed and the two disciplinary perspectives applied,
and additionally the way in which this knowledge and
understanding is demonstrated through the use of appropriate
terminology and concepts.
C: Critical thinking
This criterion assesses the extent to which critical thinking
skills have been used to analyse and evaluate the research
undertaken.
D: Presentation
This criterion assesses the extent to which the presentation
follows the standard format expected for academic writing and
the extent to which this aids effective communication.
E: Engagement
This criterion assesses the student’s engagement with their
research focus and the research process. It will be applied by
the examiner at the end of the assessment of the essay, after
considering the student’s Reflections on planning and progress
form
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Criterion
OverviewoftheAssessmentCriteriafortheExtendedEssay
A:Focusand
method
Achievement
Level(0‐6)
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This criterion focuses on the topic, the research question and the methodology. It
assesses the explanation of the focus of the research (this includes the topic and the
research question), how the research will be undertaken, and how the focus is
maintained throughout the essay.
Does this essay meet the requirements for the subject for which you are
registering it?
Is your research question stated as a question?
Have you explained how your research question relates to the subject that you
selected for the extended essay?
Have you given an insight into why your area of study is important?
Is your research question feasible within the scope of the task? Could your
research question be “answered” or it is too vague?
Did you refer to your research question throughout the essay (not only in the
introduction and conclusion)?
Did you explain why you selected your methodology?
Are there other possible methods that could be used or applied to answer your
research question? How might this change the direction of your research?
If you stated a particular methodology in the introduction of your essay, or
specific sources, have you used them?
Are there any references listed in the bibliography that were not directly cited in
the text?
B:Knowledgeand
understanding
Achievement
Level(0‐6)
This criterion assesses the extent to which the research relates to the subject
area/discipline used to explore the research question; or in the case of the world
studies extended essay, the issue addressed and the two disciplinary perspectives
applied; and additionally, the way in which this knowledge and understanding is
demonstrated through the use of appropriate terminology and concepts.
Have you explained how your research question relates to a specific subject you
selected for the extended essay?
Have you used relevant terminology and concepts throughout your essay as they
relate to your particular area of research?
Is it clear that the sources you are using are relevant and appropriate to your
research question?
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Do you have a range of sources, or have you only relied on one particular type, for
example internet sources?
Is there a reason why you might not have a range? Is this justified?
C:Criticalthinking
Achievement
Level(0‐12)
This criterion assesses the extent to which critical thinking skills have been used to
analyse and evaluate the research undertaken.
Have you made links between your results and data collected and your research
question?
If you included data or information that is not directly related to your research
question have you explained its importance?
Are your conclusions supported by your data?
If you found unexpected information or data have you discussed its importance?
Have you provided a critical evaluation of the methods you selected?
Have you considered the reliability of your sources (peer-reviewed journals,
internet, and so on)?
Have you mentioned and evaluated the significance of possible errors that may
have occurred in your research?
Are all your suggestions of errors or improvements relevant?
Have you evaluated your research question?
Have you compared your results or findings with any other sources?
Is there an argument that is clear and easy to follow and directly linked to
answering your research question, and which is supported by evidence?
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D:Presentation
Achievement
Level(0‐4)
This criterion assesses the extent to which the presentation follows the standard
format expected for academic writing and the extent to which this aids effective
communication.
Have you read and understood the presentation requirements of the extended
essay?
Have you chosen a font that will be easy for examiners to read on-screen?
Is your essay double-spaced and size 12 font?
Are the title and research question mentioned on the cover page?
Are all pages numbered?
Have you prepared a correct table of contents?
Do the page numbers in the table of contents match the page numbers in the text?
Is your essay subdivided into correct sub-sections, if this is applicable to the
subject?
Are all figures and tables properly numbered and labelled?
Does your bibliography contain only the sources cited in the text?
Did you use the same reference system throughout the essay?
Does the essay have less than 4,000 words?
Is all the material presented in the appendices relevant and necessary?
Have you proofread the text for spelling or grammar errors?
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E:Engagement
Achievement
Level(0‐6)
This criterion assesses the student’s engagement with their research focus and the
research process. It will be applied by the examiner at the end of the assessment of the
essay, after considering the student’s RPPF.
Have you demonstrated your engagement with your research topic and the research
process?
Have you highlighted challenges you faced and how you overcame them?
Will the examiner get a sense of your intellectual and skills development?
Will the examiner get a sense of your creativity and intellectual initiative?
Will the examiner get a sense of how you responded to actions and ideas in the
research process?
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Reflection in the Extended Essay
In critically reviewing your engagement in the research process, it might help to think in terms of three levels of
reflection: descriptive, analytical and evaluative reflection. The table below gives examples of guiding questions
to help with this. They are not exhaustive.
Levelof
reflection
Exampleofthekindsofquestionsstudentsmayhaveaskedandansweredofthemselves
Descriptive
What did I do?
How did I undertake my research?
What were the problems I faced?
Did my approach or strategies change throughout the process?
What have been the high and the low points of the research and writing process?
Analytical
Was my research successful?
If I changed my approach or strategies during the process, why did I do this?
What did I learn from the experience in terms of my understanding of the subject area
and/or the skills needed to undertake research?
How has my understanding of the topic and research process developed throughout
the task?
Evaluative
If I were to undertake this research again, would I do it differently—if so, why or why
not?
What has affected this?
If I did do the research again, would I change the theories applied or the
methodological approach? Would this have led to a different outcome?
What can I conclude from this?
Were the strategies I used for undertaking my research the most appropriate for
achieving my outcomes?
What, if any, questions emerged as a result of my research that I was not expecting?
Would these questions influence my approach if I were to undertake the research
again?
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REFLECTIONS ON PLANNING AND PROGRESS
Supervisor name
Candidate session number
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Candidate name
School number
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School name
Examination session (May or November)
Year
Candidate:
From May 2018, please refer to the ‘Extended Essay Student Guide’ when
completing
this form. This form is to be completed by the candidate during the course and completion of their EE.
This document records reflections on your planning and progress, and the nature of your discussions with
your supervisor. You must undertake three formal reflection sessions with your supervisor: The first
formal reflection session should focus on your initial ideas and how you plan to undertake your research;
the interim reflection session is once a significant amount of your research has been completed, and the
final session will be in the form of a viva voce once you have completed and handed in your EE. This
document acts as a record in supporting the authenticity of your work.
The completion of this form is a
mandatory requirement
of the EE for first
assessment
May 2018.
It must be submitted together with the completed EE for
assessment
under Criterion E.
Supervisor:
You must have at least three reflection sessions with each candidate, one early on in the
process, an interim meeting and then the final viva voce. Other sessions are permitted but do not need to
be recorded on this sheet. After each session candidates must record their reflections and as the
supervisor you must sign and date this form.
Reflections
on planning
and progress
Candidate comments
Date
Supervisor
signature
First reflection
session
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Interim
reflection
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Final reflection
– viva voce
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Supervisor’s comments:
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Candidate’s declaration
This declaration must be signed by the candidate; otherwise a grade may not be issued.
The extended essay I am submitting is my own work (apart from guidance allowed by the International
Baccalaureate).
I have
acknowledged
each use of the words, graphics or ideas of another person, whether written, oral or
visual. I am aware that the word limit for all extended essays is 4000 words and that examiners are not
required to read beyond this limit.
This is the final version of my extended essay.
Candidate’s signature Date
Supervisor’s declaration
This declaration must be signed by the supervisor; otherwise a grade may not be issued.
I have read the final version of the extended essay that will be submitted to the
examiner. To the best of
my
knowledge, the extended essay is the authentic
work of the candidate.
I spent hours with the candidate discussing the progress of the extended essay.
Supervisor’s signature Date
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Using ManageBac for the
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